Sunday, June 17, 2012

Six Sunday--Have Mercy

Fun, fun for everyone!  It's time once again for Six Sentence Sunday, where authors share some of their top-notch work.

Adding six more sentences of my soon-to-be-pubbed Young Adult (Far from Mercy) from which I pulled my flash fiction short.  The short was titled "Mercy," and can be downloaded for free at SmashwordsKobo, or Barnes and Noble.

Still at the beginning with our MC, sixteen-year-old Charlie, who is not at all what she seems, so here we go:

Others around me didn’t possess my same level of control, especially Zeke, the boy beside me. His breaths came labored and loud to my ears. I checked the urge to reach a hand out, to reassure him that this night would pass just like the ones before with all still safe inside, the sun rising on a new day. But I didn't currently do girly, and I was no longer Charlotte Baker. Here, I was Charlie Little, the boy the community took in, along with a baby sister and a dying mother, only a little over six months ago. If they ever thought differently, I wouldn’t last the night.

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Happy Writing and Reading,


Cherie

17 comments:

DasNuk said...

Very thrilling, clear and concise and I'm definitely intrigued by your six.

Cherie Marks said...

I'm glad you liked it.

Joanne Stewart said...

Love her struggle here. Great description of her circumstances.

Cherie Marks said...

Yep, her struggle is just beginning.

Veronica Scott said...

SO much to wonder about here, really makes me want to read more and SOON! Great six!

Patricia Preston said...

Wow! The last line hooked me. Great writing.

Paula Martin said...

Intriguing six, definitely makes me want to find out more.

Taryn Raye said...

Yep, definitely leaves you wanting more Cherie! Very intriguing!

Elaine Cantrell said...

Very intriguing. Bet hard times are coming.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Very intriguing. Bet hard times are coming.

Calisa Rhose said...

This leaves a need to know more feeling! Great six Cherie.

Sandy Nachlinger said...

GREAT tension in this scene. Poor Charlotte/Charlie. It must be difficult to curtail her natural tenderness and to maintain her identity. All of this sounds like the makings of a terrific plot.

Jean Marie Ward said...

Great six! If this ended the page, I'd HAVE TO turn it. :-)

Cherie Marks said...

Thank you, ladies for stopping by.

Amy said...

Love the layers of mystery in this six. And I love that she's "Charlie" instead of "Charlotte"... great way to highlight her characterization!

gemma parkes said...

Beautifully written, tense.

Ranae Rose said...

Sounds like she's had to toughen up pretty quickly!