Adding six more sentences of my soon-to-be-pubbed Young Adult (Far from Mercy) from which I pulled my flash fiction short. The short was titled "Mercy," and can be downloaded for free at Smashwords, Kobo, or Barnes and Noble.
Still at the beginning with our MC, sixteen-year-old Charlie, who is not at all what she seems, so here we go:
Others around me didn’t possess my same level of control, especially Zeke, the boy beside me. His breaths came labored and loud to my ears. I checked the urge to reach a hand out, to reassure him that this night would pass just like the ones before with all still safe inside, the sun rising on a new day. But I didn't currently do girly, and I was no longer Charlotte Baker. Here, I was Charlie Little, the boy the community took in, along with a baby sister and a dying mother, only a little over six months ago. If they ever thought differently, I wouldn’t last the night.
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Happy Writing and Reading,
Cherie
17 comments:
Very thrilling, clear and concise and I'm definitely intrigued by your six.
I'm glad you liked it.
Love her struggle here. Great description of her circumstances.
Yep, her struggle is just beginning.
SO much to wonder about here, really makes me want to read more and SOON! Great six!
Wow! The last line hooked me. Great writing.
Intriguing six, definitely makes me want to find out more.
Yep, definitely leaves you wanting more Cherie! Very intriguing!
Very intriguing. Bet hard times are coming.
Very intriguing. Bet hard times are coming.
This leaves a need to know more feeling! Great six Cherie.
GREAT tension in this scene. Poor Charlotte/Charlie. It must be difficult to curtail her natural tenderness and to maintain her identity. All of this sounds like the makings of a terrific plot.
Great six! If this ended the page, I'd HAVE TO turn it. :-)
Thank you, ladies for stopping by.
Love the layers of mystery in this six. And I love that she's "Charlie" instead of "Charlotte"... great way to highlight her characterization!
Beautifully written, tense.
Sounds like she's had to toughen up pretty quickly!
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