Sunday, November 20, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday--Lost in New Falls

Thank you so much to all the sixers who continue to pop in, read, and comment each week.  It is a great way to go into Monday.  Here are six from my current wip--Lost in New Falls.  It's un-edited for the most part, but the opening is a nightmare for any writer and especially for Sara Delaney, the heroine of this story:


Over…so over.  Her life was over.  Her career was over.  As the sheriff’s deputies tromped around the little cabin her grandfather left her several years ago, they catalogued her missing items, but all Sara Delaney could focus on was the one major electronic that was everything to her—her laptop.  She wasn’t sure how she’d managed to swallow a barbell, but it felt like one was lodged in her chest.  Her laptop was gone, along with her all she’d written over the years.


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Happy Writing,

Cherie

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25 comments:

Zee Monodee said...

Gosh! That'd be my worst nightmare too! Intense six, loved the voice :)

veronicascott said...

Oh I feel sad for her, losing one's computer is major! But why do I have a feeling things will be all right in the end? Very evocative, excellent excerpt!

Kallypso Masters said...

Every writer reading this just backed up her laptop and stored the back-up in a secure location! Very nice Six and I can't wait to read this story. Am enjoying "Into the Fire" now! Well done!

Gayle Ramage said...

Eek! I'd be getting some superpowers and hunting down the thieves if anyone took my netbook!

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

That's why I use Dropbox! (Sorry, couldn't help it.) These are terrific. I can feel her sorrow and love the dumbbell metaphor. Great six.

Amy said...

Yikes! Nightmare, indeed! Her despair was illustrated really well, here. Nice six!

christine warner said...

Great six....I could feel her despair!

Sandra Sookoo said...

I can feel her pain, and yeah, that would be a nightmare for me too lol

Alix said...

Really well written!

Patricia said...

Great sentences and I'd love to see more. You've already pulled me in.
Patti

Jessica Subject said...

Oh, well I think I'd be freaking out just about then. Great six!

Gem Sivad said...

Oh God I felt her pain. Her laptop is gone?? Hope she had backup but I'm thinking that's a big "no."
Great six!

sue said...

yeah which is why I back up - don't trust computers. Oh, you say, but you are using one. Yes which is why I don't trust them. Excellent hook

Lorien Velez said...

Yikes! Great story setup and hook. You've definitely caught my attention.

Taryn Kincaid said...

OH-no. I just got such a sinking, nauseous feeling. This vividly brings back my first big crash -- and the ms loss.

Joanne Stewart said...

Yeah, as a writer, I am crushed for her. Terrific six.

Jessica K said...

Yikes, this will give me nightmares!! I will keep on reading this one.

Eleri Stone said...

Dropbox! That would be such a nightmare.

Roni Loren said...

Eek, every writer's nightmare for sure. It would definitely feel like barbell in your chest.

Cara Bristol said...

Oh no. That would be awful.

Karysa Faire said...

OK. That put me into a cold sweat. I had a journal stolen twenty years ago and I still miss that thing. . . . .

Lynne Murray said...

OH, NO!!! Screaming full caps NOOOO! I feel her pain! Hmm, drop box, you may have just brought them some new clients with this six! I often email myself the ms in progress. Somehow I feel like doing that immediately! A most intense six for writers in particular!

Sandra Bunino said...

Oh no - not the laptop! That is a nightmare, I feel for Sara. Fantastic six, Cherie!

Pippa Jay said...

I would be screaming!

Ranae Rose said...

Oh God, that is a writer's nightmare. I usually keep a flashdrive with my writing documents on my person just in case!